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Many people believe that international tourism has negative implication on their countries. What is the reason for it? What can be done to change the negative attitude towards international tourism?

#people #tourism #implication #countries #reason #change #attitude
It is true that international
tourism
 benefits
for
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multi-culture communication, while the
behavior
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 of the tourists may bring
negative
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a negative
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 impact
to
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 their countries. There are a variety of possible reasons for
this
, but steps can definitely be taken to tackle
this
 problem. There are three main reasons for it.
Firstly
, when the visitors go to the tourist attraction and the places of interest, they may leave with rubbish and do some damage to the construction which may cause irreversible consequences.
Secondly
, the city may be over-commercialized in consideration of the income of
tourism
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 industry. It will make a difference
on
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 the living costs for the residents living in the area and the dissension between the tourist and locals sometimes happened.
Thirdly
,
culture
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 heritage is exposed to the air and crowds overly, which is
not
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benefit
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 to
keep
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 it for long. These problems can
be
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certainly be improved. I believe the local government can do some advocation for protecting the environment and the buildings,
meanwhile
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 some moderate punishments can be utilized to warn the
behavior
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 of the tourists. Tourists themselves should respectful of differences and deepen their understanding of the local culture to avoid
the
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conflict between them and the local residents.
Moreover
, it is important for local residents to remove prejudice and misunderstanding to visitors.
Regarding international
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tourism
as
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 a vital way to promote local customs and practices. In
conclusions
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, international
tourism
benefit
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 not only
the
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cross-cultural communication but
also
the
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local economies.
Local
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The local
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 government and visitors themselves should take responsibility to build a better international
tourism
 environment.
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