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Many people believe that nature plays a more significant impact on human adult intelligence, while others claim that an individual can train himself to become high-intelligent. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Some people suppose a more crucial effect on human adult intelligence has nature, at the same time other individuals believe that everyone is able to work on themselves in order to become what they want to
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 I believe nurture is the most significant part of becoming high-intelligent.
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 that are inherited and examples of getting what they want by themselves. It is clear that
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mental
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 are identified by their genes or DNA.
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, some
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 the generation. It was scientifically proven that musical
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 situation. Hambrick’s studies showed that the genetic influence on musical success was far larger in those who
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 more.
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, some kinds of skills may be inborn.
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, cultivation may be a reason
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succeeding
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. Case in point
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hard-working and learning
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 the way people reach their goals. In
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 of their names. Ed Sheeran is the most relatable model of it. He started his career singing on the roads.
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, learning and training
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 important in making a name and
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. In conclusion,
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 nature has a great impact on human adult intelligence, it gives only a potential to become a high-intelligence, and training own self may develop
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 potential or
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 create it from scratch and establish it.
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Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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