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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: Some people think it would be a good idea for schools to teach every young person how to be a good parent. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Describe the skills a person needs to be a good parent. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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in general, teaching
children
 how to be parents is not a good concept, they should enjoy
their
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 a moment and play with their tools. but in the world today there is no
mercie
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more
 they destroy the innocent little one. I completely disagree with
this
 intention, and I will explain it in
a
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apply
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several ways in
this
 easy
by
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detail.
firstly
, when you are a young person you hate what is marriage means and you don'
t
 like to hear anything related to that topic.
for example
, when your family or your father ask you do you have boyfriends and you run away or
being
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are
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 shy from that topic. for that reason, studying
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a subject
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subject
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subjects
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 related to mother or marriage is so difficult to accept for the
children
.
secondly
, there are a
lot
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children
 who get married at
young
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a young
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 age and there don'
t
 have a
lot
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oflot
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experiences
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experience
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 in marriage life.
for instance
,
some
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in some
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 Arabic
country
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countries
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 girls get married at a young age without education,
moreover
, their parents don'
t
 have the
affore
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afore
afford
effort
 to let them go
school
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to school
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. for any
reasons
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reason
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, there is not a good concept to teach the offspring how to be parents or let them get married at
young
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a young
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 age. to conclude, it is good for the
children
 to leave their life as babies to play with the toys or be the ancient
humen
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human
. in my opinion, it is so bad design to teach young people about stuff they don'
t
 understand a lot from it.
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