Establishing good relationships in the workplace is not important, as the primary goal of every person is to focus on work. To what extent do you agree?

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Some people think that making better
relationship
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relationships
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in the company is not essential because it makes employees not
to
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concentrate on their
work
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.
On the other hand
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, I partly disagree with
this
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opinion as
good
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relationship helps
work
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efficiency.
To begin
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with, excessive
relation
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between workers can harm
atmosphere
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the atmosphere
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in
workplace
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the workplace
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. To illustrate, they may take too much time on relax or chat with their team members if people focus on making
connection
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rather than working.
This
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leads to
lessen
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amount
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the amount
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of
work
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which each
employees
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have to do on a day and
speed
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the speed
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of
work
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would decline while they working.
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, company profit would
be decrease
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because of
relationship
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the relationship
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.
However
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, Good
relation
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relations
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can make high efficiency
on
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work
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. High connection with co-workers can
leads
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to communication skills in the business.
For example
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, workers who are junior
of
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in
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their job can speak their opinions easily to their boss or senior workers. Through
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this
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these
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circumstances,
work
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atmosphere and cooperation between team can be better than
strictive
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restrictive
companies. To conclude
with
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apply
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, I believe that it is important to establish
high
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a high
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bond in
company
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the company
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as it will make better
work
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efficiency while people
work
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in the business.
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, all companies should invest time
for
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in
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establishing
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a connection
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connection
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connections
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in
workplace
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the workplace
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.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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