The prevention of health problems and illness is more important than treatment and medicine. Government funding should reflect this. To what extent do you agree?

It is commonly believed by certain individuals that advertising how to prevent illness is more important than

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medicine, and government should pay more attention and provide financial support for it. As far as I

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, both aspects are important but we do anxiety about

prevention

. I will discuss

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below.

First

of all, it is necessary to

concern

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the

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prevention

of health problems, for it can efficiently save treatment time and strongly decline economic pressure. Nowadays, it is

easily

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to hear from the newspapers and other social

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media

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medias

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media

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that youth get

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because of

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stressful

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and unhealthy living

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, youth can get a timely treatment schedule if they have the habit of physical examination per year.

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,

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treatment timely

is

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not only means saving the life but

also

saving the money, because the price

medicine

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of medicine

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is highly increasing as we all know. It is no doubt that individuals with different kinds of habits and health

prevention

methods, so

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we need

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the government's

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help that

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us what are the correct actions and how to

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. Take washing hands,

for instance

. After a long time

educating

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of educating

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and advertising in

kindergarden

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kindergarten

and primary school, each citizen

establish

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a permanent habit to wash hands before each meal which highly drop

down

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the

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of virus and extend people's life. In conclusion, I

am totally agree

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that government should promote the

prevention

of health problems through financial methods and administration approaches,

for example

,

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physical

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check

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for free for each person each year, filming voluntary videos, etc. Arising people's interest in

healthy

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health

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is not only directly

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their individuals, but

also

benefit

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benefits

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our society that declined the

happeness

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happiness

of social medical problems and

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people's age.