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Nature has a more significant impact on human adult intelligence than nurture. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Nature has a more considerable influence on adult intelligence than upbringing. It is agreed
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that the development of intelligence depends on genes and brainpower is inherited from
parents
.
Firstly
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relationship between
IQ
level
 and nurture. It is clear that brain size, intellectual development, and memory are passed on by genetics. Scientists believe that abilities
such
 as associative memory, visualization and thought are inherited from
parents
 to children .One example of
this
 is
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a study
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 that
have
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 shown that more than 85% of children with good intelligence have
parents
 who are good at science and math.
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level
 of
parents
 is carried to an adult, but
this
 process is
also
 closely related to nurture. Inheritance of cognitive skills depends on the person itself and environmental factors.
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, twins are
initially
 born with the same
level
 of
IQ
, but depending on
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themselves they will be different.According to experiments, scientists are close to
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% chance of getting the same
level
 of
IQ
 as
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parents
. In conclusion, it was revealed that natural factors are more significant than environmental factors
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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