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In recent years, many small local shops have closed because customers travel to large shopping centres or malls to do their shopping. Is this a positive or a negative development.

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In the past few years,
people
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 started
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like
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apply
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to go
large
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to large
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 shopping
malls
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instead
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 of local shops which leads to
closing
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the closing
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 of small shops. I think it is a positive development and in the following
paragraphs
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 I would
flas
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flash
 a light
over
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 my views.
To begin
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 with, new shopping
malls
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 are
build
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 up
everyday
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 to ease
customer's
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customers'
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 shopping. It provides jobs to many
people
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 like engineers, architecture and to
other
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others
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 after
it's
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 completion. So it contributes
in
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to
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 the economy of
country
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the country
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.
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Second
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 thing
the
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is the
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 infrastructure,
malls
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 are
build
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built
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 up with new technology and safety which gives their customers assurance and lurks
number
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a number
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 of buyers. To move forward,
people
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 can enjoy a number of things there like they can do shopping,
watch
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watching
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a movie
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movie
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movies
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 and other play activities.
Those
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people
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 who are very busy and want to purchase things from one place, shopping
malls
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 are for them. It satisfies the customer's
need
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needs
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. In the
end
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,end
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 it can be said that shopping
malls
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 change the way of shopping and
brings
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bring
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 a posting development in the society.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • retail outlets
  • consumer behavior
  • shop locally
  • convenience
  • variety
  • economic growth
  • job creation
  • community
  • personal touch
  • small businesses
  • local economy
  • big corporations
  • dependence
  • shopping habits
  • urbanization
  • globalization
  • competition
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