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In the past, people stored knowledge in books. Nowadays people store knowledge on the internet. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Knowledge
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 storage has become a debate topic in recent years.
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, there are some individuals who believe that nowadays it is easier and quicker to store
knowledge
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 on the
internet
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 rather than in books. From my perspective, the benefits of
this
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 are more than the drawbacks. On the one hand, there are some disadvantages to using the
Internet
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.
Firstly
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, there
is
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are
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 more fake data on the
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 than
one
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in one
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source book
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sourcebook
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;
as a result
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, viewers could easily access
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the wrong
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information
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.
Secondly
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, people have to buy devices, wifi or data to access the
Internet
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. Not everyone is able to afford expensive devices or the
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 while people can easily borrow books from public libraries.
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, it is much cheaper and safer to store
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 in a book.
On the other hand
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, I still believe that it is more convenient to use the
internet
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 than a book.
Firstly
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, by using the
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 readers can find the
information
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 quicker. The sources of
knowledge
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 on the
internet
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 can be easily accessible from any time and any location if viewers have the
Internet
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.
Secondly
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, storing
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from
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on
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 the
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 is a good way to keep it for a long time.
For example
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, people can keep ebooks,
pictures
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and pictures
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 on Cloud storage and download
it
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them
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 on their devices to keep them safe without worrying about being torn or damaged. In conclusion, even though storing the
information
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in
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 the
internet
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 still has some cons
such
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 as wrong
information
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, and buying the digital device, I believe that it will bring more benefits for readers.
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