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In the past, people stored knowledge in books. Nowadays people store knowledge on the internet. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Knowledge
 storage has become a debate topic in recent years.
Thus
, there are some individuals who believe that nowadays it is easier and quicker to store
knowledge
 on the
internet
 rather than in books. From my perspective, the benefits of
this
 are more than the drawbacks. On the one hand, there are some disadvantages to using the
Internet
.
Firstly
, there
is
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are
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 more fake data on the
Internet
 than
one
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in one
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source book
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sourcebook
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;
as a result
, viewers could easily access
wrong
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the wrong
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information
.
Secondly
, people have to buy devices, wifi or data to access the
Internet
. Not everyone is able to afford expensive devices or the
Internet
 while people can easily borrow books from public libraries.
In other words
, it is much cheaper and safer to store
information
 in a book.
On the other hand
, I still believe that it is more convenient to use the
internet
 than a book.
Firstly
, by using the
Internet
 readers can find the
information
 quicker. The sources of
knowledge
 on the
internet
 can be easily accessible from any time and any location if viewers have the
Internet
.
Secondly
, storing
knowledge
from
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on
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 the
Internet
 is a good way to keep it for a long time.
For example
, people can keep ebooks,
pictures
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and pictures
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 on Cloud storage and download
it
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them
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 on their devices to keep them safe without worrying about being torn or damaged. In conclusion, even though storing the
information
in
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on
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 the
internet
 still has some cons
such
 as wrong
information
, and buying the digital device, I believe that it will bring more benefits for readers.
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