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Some people believe that developments in technology make life too complex and that the solution is for everyone to accept a simpler way of life without using that technology. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some critics argue that advancements in
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 contribute to a much more complicated life, and users would be better off if they avoid using
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 a complete ban on
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 has its merits, I disagree with it as it is counter-productive.
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 with, many critics believe that complete avoidance of
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 simplifies an individual’s life because it removes unnecessary
distractions
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. Nowadays, the Internet is ubiquitous. They can use their mobile phones or laptops whenever and wherever they want. Unfortunately, these devices have become sources of
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 for them.
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 of concentrating on their tasks, they often end up wasting their time surfing the Internet or watching short video clips.
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, if there were no
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 available, users would be free from
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 and it would be easier for them to complete their assignments.
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, I believe that avoiding
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 entirely is counter-productive and there is a better remedy available.
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 and foremost, new
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, in reality, has brought more convenience to people's life. Take the example of sending emails to colleagues and customers. If workers stopped using emails, they might have to resort to snail mail, which would take days or even months to reach recipients. Using time-management applications to reduce a person’s screentime is more appropriate. In
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 way, they can utilise
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 when needed and restrict their usage when they are focusing on their priorities. In conclusion, while it is true that people will have fewer
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 if they do not have access to
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, I disagree with
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 method.
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 is because it may be a success at the expense of productivity, and using time-management applications is a better way to regulate users’ lives.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • streamline
  • efficiency
  • healthcare outcomes
  • vast amounts of information
  • educational resources
  • face-to-face interactions
  • social skills
  • excessive
  • distractions
  • productivity
  • cybersecurity threats
  • data privacy issues
  • environmental degradation
  • e-waste
  • energy consumption
  • harmonious lifestyle
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