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Some people see the teaching children at home is better than studying in school

#people #children #home #school
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The teaching
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children
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 is the most important thing for them and for their
their
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future which reflect on the country that they live
.
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is
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tow
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two
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 methods for
lrearning
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learning
children
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. the
first
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 one is the teaching at
home
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 and the other which is at
home
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 and both of them
has
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 advantages and disadvantages so in
this
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 article I will talk about these methods and compare
between
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them. Learning
children
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 and
develop
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 their abilities needs a lot of work from their parents to be sure that they will succeed in their life. In my
opinion
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 I don't prefer teaching
children
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 at
home
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 because the aim of teaching is to develop their knowledge and make their abilities and skills stronger, so when the students contact with their colleagues in the
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classroom
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class room
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classroom
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 they will speak together and
everyone
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 of them
wil
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will
 get more benefits in their life.
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 here is an important thing that we have to
face
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it
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which is when
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children
childrens
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children
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 go out from
home
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 they will be able to
face
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 the community and could solve any difficulty could see
it
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which make them stronger than before, while the studying at
home
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 doesn't make any
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 in their personality which I believe it will be very dangerous for
them
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the
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 life in the future.
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 when
children
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studying
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study
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 at school definitely he could
face
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 some kinds of disability students who have
a
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limited skills,
therefore
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 the
children
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 will know more how to deal with them and he will be more creative while studying at
home
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 he
doesn't
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 able to
face
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 them. In
conclusion
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the
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studying in
the
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school is more important for
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children
children's
childrens
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children
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 and for their families and for their country than
the
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studying at
home
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