SOME BELIEVE THAT THROUGH MIGRATION DEVELOPED COUNTRIES ARE STEALING FROM DEVELOPING NATIONS WHILE OTHERS SAY THAT MIGRATION IS NOTHING BUT A NATURAL PROCESS. TO WHAT EXTENT DO YOU AGREE. GIVE YOUR OWN OPINION.

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we can trace
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movements all
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the entire humanity's history, there
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been
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always
very contradictory points of view regarding
this
subject. Nowadays, there are people that still believe that
migration
is a negative phenomenon for the development of their own countries while others sustain that it is anything but negative, because
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a natural process it allows economic and social strengthening. In the present dissertation, I'd like to suggest why all of us should support and
encorage
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encourage
migration
. In order to do it, I'll present a couple of arguments and examples, as well as
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draft some conclusions. In the
first
place, I'd want to drive your attention to the fact that since the earliest times, humanity has been on the move in order to
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their needs or desires, or because they shall
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escape conflict, persecution or poverty. By doing so, they have contributed to the development of their destinations, as the United Nations' research
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suggested. According to
this
global institution, the countries with the most migrants have shown an increased positive trend
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economic growth, as well
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enrichment. That's the case
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UK
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, where refugees and migrants have been a cardinal factor
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its economic power. In the
second
place, we all live in a global
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, where sadly money can move
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and
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than humans. That means that we still need to push ourselves to perceive
migration
as a natural event, as well as to demand our
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governments
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follow the New York Declaration which commits to protecting the safety, dignity and human rights and fundamental freedoms of all migrants, regardless of their migratory status. In conclusion,
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put in risk countries, but the
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, it's the natural process that all
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our history as humanity
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allowed us to build our cities, cultures and future.
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