Some people believe that cell phones should be for personal use only. others however feel cell phones should be used mostly for work. discuss both views and give your opinion.

Although
it is something thought that mobile phones ought to
be
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use
just for private reasons, other
people
think that mobile
phone
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should be useful mainly for
work
. In my opinion, I consider for
work
,
cell
phone
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help
to
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people
to
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organize
the
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daily
work
. On the one hand, some
people
believe that mobile need to
be
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use
to
work
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because often could be a good tool to create
a
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good team coordination and I agree.
In other words
,
mobile
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phone
has different
application
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applications
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to excel the cooperation between the
team
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teamwork
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work
,
consequently
,
produces
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a better organization.
For example
, there are works where employees need to send
report
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every day about the daily objective and daily
task
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tasks
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, with an application like
whatsapp
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WhatsApp
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you can organize the
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teamwork
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team
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work
and distribute quickly the tasks.
Furthermore
, with
this
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tools
people
can write instantly email and send
to
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them to
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another
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people
,
as a result
, they may have an
efficiently
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job.
On the other hand
, it is often believed that it is better
use
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the
cell
phone
for private
reason
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reasons
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.
Moreover
, parents always need to know about their children, where they go or what they do every day and
cell
phone
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could be an excellent tool to control the routine of their children.
For instance
, children may be controlled with
application
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an application
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to know the
exactly
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ubication since the ubication can
be send
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in
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any time of the day. In conclusion, while
people
may vary in their opinions, I think that
cell
phone
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have a better
use
at
work
to have a
succeed
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collaboration
work
and teams could
use
this
tool to organize the daily routine at
job
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.
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