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Some people claim that not enough waste from homes is recycled. They say that the only way to increase recycling is for governments to make it a legal requirement. To what extent do you think laws are needed to make people recycle more of their wastes

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Waste
management
 plays a vital role in the
environment
. Several
people
 believe that the
government
 should act and acquire legal actions in terms of recycling
of
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waste
 materials that should start at home. In my opinion, I agree that
government
 should take an action about
waste
management
 because of the unexpected climate change and
second
, the unawareness of the
people
 about the effects
in
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 the
environment
. The
uncertainly
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 of climate change usually happens
in
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 the planet. One reason is the
waste
 material that
where
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 not properly managed.
For example
, the pandemic Covid-19 that according to the research started in the Wuhan market because of
waste
management
.
Furthermore
, the majority of the
people
 are unaware
about
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 the negative effects of the garbage in the surroundings.
This
 means that the
government
 should have a program to educate
people
 about
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 of
waste
 materials. Simple education regarding the importance of
waste
 can lead
in
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positive
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outcome
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such
 as young
people
learns
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 how to
seggregate
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segregate
 garbage and how to value the
environment
.
For instance
, the Pasig River in the Philippines become
detriment
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 because of the nearby factories and
household
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households
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 dumping their
waste
 material in the river and, the
government
 had made a program to revive the river. In conclusion, I strongly agree that the
government
 ought to make
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law
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laws
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 about
waste
management
 because of the unpredicted changing of climate and
second
, lesser knowledge of
people
 about the
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effect
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affect
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effect
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 of garbage
in
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 the
environment
.
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