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Some people belive that eventually all jobs will be done by artificial intelligence robots. What is your opinion?

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Technology has become one of our best discoverments in the world, a lot of people argue that eventually all
jobs
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 will be done by artificial intelligence
robots
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 technology has big importance around the globe, I personally do not agree with
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 opinion. Nowadays scientists are creating certain kinds of bots that help with the housework.
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, people believe that the same kinds of
robots
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 could replace their own
jobs
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 in the future, and the fast rate of development of the human race, it's giving more reason to the theory, making it easier to believe. But I extremely disagree about it, in fact, there are some
jobs
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 that require human skills, some that artificial intelligence wouldn’t have. People are afraid of being replaced in their
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 by machines, but they don’t think
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 about the problem, it wouldn’t work with some
jobs
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 that require the employee to talk with the customer.
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, having a conversation with a customer in a restaurant about describing the plate that they are about to eat, could probably engage the client to order it,
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robots
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 could
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 do the job of a chef, but they won’t have the feeling of hospitality that a person could give. So in my personal opinion,
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robots
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 could be used to do minor
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 like cleaning the street or making food, they won’t be able to interact with their clients,
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, not all
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 could possibly be taken by
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