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Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

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The wonder of technology and the Internet has changed the job market completely. In today's world, a major number of individuals prefer to start their own business rather than work for
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 couple of years, because of
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 folk are frightened about
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employment security and
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 they have become bold to risks to start their own firm.
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 are frightened about their job security.
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, so far, many organisations are facing the loss,
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started their own small business.
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, In the world of social media, new opportunities for isolated working have emerged. To explain, the young generation
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 is now working as full-time influencers, through which they perform brand endowment and become financially stable.
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 employment person has to put his efforts all
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 his money gets spent until it becomes profitable.
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stared
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 working as a marketing consultant
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 and managing social profiles of
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alterations and handling utter
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 the comments. Considering the importance of time in
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 on my health. In conclusion, one cause of
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 stress and its impact on health are some drawbacks of working alone.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-employment
  • freelancing
  • entrepreneurship
  • autonomy
  • financial stability
  • work-life balance
  • financial insecurity
  • lack of support
  • resources
  • long working hours
  • uncertain income
  • job security
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