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The shown bar chart gives some information about the proportion of fast food which was eaten by USA's people in the restaurants during a decade, from the year 2003 to the year 2013. Overall, most people tended to eat fast food at least once or twice a
week
, while a few people were not interested in eating junk food. Notably, the smallest category has belonged to those who had
this
 type of cuisine each day.
To begin
 with, during
this
 ten-year period of time, most population enjoyed eating at fast cooking restaurants frequently, once or twice a
week
 between one out of fifth to almost 40 per cent of dwellers.
Also
, the two
next
 categories have been for citizens who have gone to these eateries several times a
week
 or a few times a
week
, with between 16 to 20% and under a fifth in all
this
 period, respectively.
On the other hand
, just below five per cent have not had any desire for eating fast meals at all, or they have been obsessed with using constantly these types of fatty foods and
this
 has been an eating habit for them.
Finally
, we see that in all these 10 years, folk have followed an approximately similar pattern in the appetites for unhealthy nutrition in
this
 country.
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