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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #reason #language #travel #work #country #someone
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It is widely recognized that nowadays, learning a
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language
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 is a global common phenomenon. It is often argued that
this
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 reason for learning another country’s languages is for a trip or having a job in another nation, while others regard that there are other various purposes for a new
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 of all, there is a persuasive argument that
people
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 learn another
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 for certain reasons
besides
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 work and travel.
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 it could be for various other purposes like
to understand
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and
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worldwide
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world wide
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 media which is shared all over the world.
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, there is a reliable case in Korea, ‘Squid game’ in ‘ Netflix’, which is produced in Korea
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 Korean. It is getting popular all over the world,
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, the demand for
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 who are keen to learn Korean has increased dramatically.
On the other hand
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, it is clear that
people
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 acquiring a
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language
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 for going overseas or being employed in another country are more practical
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 for learning a
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language
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. The ability
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native
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the native
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language
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 in
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 land could provide
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wide-range
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 of opportunities to live. By way of illustration, I majored in ‘ Chinese ‘ at university and
to study
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 abroad in China. Since I acquired high levels of Chinese
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 skills, I’ve been employed as an interpreter in a trading company in China before graduating
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.
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, I firmly believe that the most important and fundamental reason for learning
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language
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 is for travelling and getting an occupation abroad. To sum up, it is apparent that studying
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language
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 is a good way to understand another nation,
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however
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conversely
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 it is undeniable that learning a
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language
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 should have more practical goals for life.
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • multilingual
  • linguistic proficiency
  • globalized world
  • cross-cultural communication
  • immersive experience
  • adaptability
  • cultural exchange
  • interpersonal skills
  • employment prospects
  • empathy
  • intellectual development
  • overcome language barriers
  • global market
  • resourceful
  • life-changing
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