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People’s behaviour varies from country to country. When traveling to a different country, people should copy the behaviour and habits of the inhabitants of the country they visit. Do you agree or disagree?

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In
this
 contemporary era, the majority of
people
 get enjoyment through travelling to different destinations. Wherever some of them declare that travellers should want to know about culture and native
people
's behaviours
,
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 when they abroad another geographical areas. Certainly, I agree with
this
 statement and I will elaborate
my
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 opinion too.
To begin
 with, when a person chooses to travel
international
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to international
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 locations, definitely
hope
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 to gain knowledge about that nation's cultures and behaviours.
For example
, In Srilanka , foreigners are welcomed by native
people
with
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by
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saying
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 "Ayubowan" . Whenever tourists do not know anything
of
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about
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the inhabitants
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inhabitants
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inhabitants'
inhabitant's
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 habits and they get confused, apart from that
faced
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 difficulties in that society. Particularly, we should need to know these things because
as a result
, we
able
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 to communicate and we can fulfil our needs and requirements around the globe.
On the other hand
, cooking styles and table manners are various bin place to place. Wherever visitors should want to know about what are the regular meals and food items as it assists them to survive
on
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in
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another geographical locations
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another geographical location
other geographical locations
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.
For instance
, a person who has talents in
cooking
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the cooking
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 field, when he
go
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goes
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 another foreign destination Of course, he does want to gain knowledge about
people
's
liked
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likes
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 and dislikes on specific foods and beverages.
Therefore
, they have
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the advantages
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advantages
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 to occur more and more job opportunities in
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the
an
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international world. In conclusion, due to these
factors
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,factors
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people
 should wish to gain information about
people
's habits and demeanour in that particular country. Unless we try to get
known
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to know
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 these things , we will not have space to
learning
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such
 significant details
are
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that are
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 really
benefit
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beneficial
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 for our lives whenever we travel
other
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to other
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 places.
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