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Some people argue that it is more important to have an enjoyable job than earn a lots of money. Others disagree and think that good salary leads to better life. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

#people #job #lots #money #salary #life
Nowadays, there is no doubt huge income offers
benificial
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beneficial
 for the family. While some certain
individals
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individuals
 think that satisfaction at the
job
 is more crucial than
runing
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running
 behind
money
. Others claim that a
handsom
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handsome
 salary is important to live a comfortable lifestyle all over the world. In my opinion,
however
, I believe that in most cases
this
 depends on the
sitation
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situation
 of the
person
 whether he has a family to feed or look after only
him self
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himself
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 as a single
person
. Some people who state that high payable work or profession is necessary in
orer
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order
 to have a good life and they might be thinking that because the majority people live in a joint family and most cases whole family depends on one
person
 that father, mother or an adult
eldely
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elderly
 family member of their family.
For instance
, in most
of
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the Asian countries, Sri Lanka and India
that
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father is the leader of the family and he has to take care of his unemployed wife,
his
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and his
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 children under age 18. Some of the family have around three to five children, not only that
,
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 but
also
 needed some
money
 to look after his parents as well as his brought family members
such
 as unmarried siblings, uncle or aunt.
This
 will clearly
indicates
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 the
important
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 of
huge
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a huge
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 salary
will
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that will
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 always fulfil
difent
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different
 type of individual needs. In
others
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other words
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word
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,word
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 more
money
 needs to gain better and
healthy
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more healthy
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balance
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balanced
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 life for all the family members. And
also
 big income gives more chances to save
money
 in the banks or buy properties and keep for their future.
Moreover
,
that
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children require proper higher education and suitable marriage once they complete
education
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the education
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 that
wish
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 all parents.
On the other hand
, those who tell that enjoy at their career all the time is more valuable than
earn
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earning
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a lots
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a lot
lots
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 of
money
 and he would continue his
job
 with satisfaction and it leads to get more creativity and much more
prodctivity
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productivity
as a result
 gain success
amoung
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among
 the colleagues in the office or between the companies and get the prices.
However
, some
of
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the doctors and
psychologist
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psychologists
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 say as
evidence
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evidenced
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 in the
artical
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article
,
If
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that If
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 someone once not happy with his career it will automatically effects
for
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him emotionally and physically.
Hence
, he has at
risk
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the risk
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 of getting health problems
suuch
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such
 as diabetes,
fluctuuation
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fluctuation
fluctuations
 of blood pressure and cardiac diseases.
Therefore
 it is considered to think about
humen
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human
job
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satisfaction
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satisfactions
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satisfaction
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 in their jobs. In
conclsion
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conclusion
,
nevertheless
, those who earn
huge
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a huge
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amont
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amount
amounts
 of salary would fulfil the needs of the
person
 and his whole family
dependers
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depends
defenders
dependents
 and
also
job
 satisfaction make a very important role in
the
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life and consider it
in to
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into
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 account.
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