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Nowadays, experience is more valued in the workplace than knowledge in many countries. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

#workplace #countries #outweigh
Without a doubt, both
knowledge
Change to a plural noun
knowledges
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 gained from
books
 or
experience
 is a learning process and each has its own advantages.
However
, book
knowledge
 is limited by space, and practical
experience
 can be learned without limit. From my perspective, the advantages of practical
experience
 outweigh the disadvantages. The primary reason is that one learns best by doing. Basically, it is easy to forget what we learn if we only study in
books
.
Moreover
, I do believe that making
mistakes
 is the best way to learn.
For instance
,
people
 learn a new language. They have to learn four skills, including listening, speaking, reading and writing. Reading and listening are all about inputting the new language. After learning, they have to use it in speaking and writing. During practising, when they make
mistakes
such
 as using wrong tenses
then
 they will learn how to use them correctly.
As a result
, once
people
 make
mistakes
 and learn from them, they will not repeat them anymore. Even more important, though, is the fact that ability has to be learned from practising not only from
books
.
For example
, communicating with
people
 is a vital skill in the workplace and you have to try to deal with customers, suppliers, or colleagues physically. In the meantime, you will
experience
, make
mistakes
, and
finally
 learn a new ability from them. Unfortunately, these kinds of abilities can only be learned from practical
experience
.
People
 will not teach you and you cannot learn by reading
books
 either. As you gain more
experience
 in the same field, you can level up yourself. Eventually, you master the skills and you will not forget them forever In conclusion, if learning should be without limit, the
knowledge
 we gain from
experience
 is undoubtedly more valuable than book
knowledge
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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