You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer . In your letter , Say how you feel about his performance Give details of your musical activities Explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities

Dear Jay, I am writing to thank you for your outstanding performance yesterday. I was over the moon when I listened to your powerful words.
Although
classical music is not my cup of tea, I enjoyed your performance and your pleasant voice as well. My friends
also
were happy with your professional way of singing. I have some music-related activities.
For example
, I have been playing the guitar for seven years so much that I mastered it. All my friends praise me for my professional performance. I had
also
played guitar at some local concerts. I sometimes go to play the guitar in public places to increase my popularity among people. Even though I know that you are always busy, I would like you to share one of my videos on your Facebook page since you have many followers or you can comment positively on one of my videos. I hope you will consider supporting me favourably. Thank you in advance. yours sincerely, Ayman Shabka
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that the greeting and closing are more formal and appropriate for a letter to a professional. Also, include a clear call to action in the closing.
task achievement
The response covers the main points but lacks specific details and development of ideas. Connect the musical activities more closely to the request for support.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • stellar performance
  • captivating
  • musical prowess
  • talent
  • repertoire
  • collaboration
  • mentorship
  • resonate
  • aspiring musician
  • composition
  • rendition
  • inspirational
  • vocal range
  • harmonize
  • skillset
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