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In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case ? Do you think this a positive or negative situation ?

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Many
people
 argue that
rental
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a rental
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house
 is not good as
purchase
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purchasing
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 it, in my
opinion
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,opinion
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 I think
this
 is
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negative
nagative
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a nagative
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 situation because each
people
 have their own lifestyle and different living
plan
, buying a
house
 does not an answer for every
people
. Purchasing a
house
 is
such
 a big deal for every
people
 because they have to
splend
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spend
 a high amount of money
with
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on
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 it, some
people
 have to collect their money almost of their
life
 to get it. So it
mean
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means
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 that they have to be ready for it and
well considered
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well-considered
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 before having a decision. Nowadays,
people
 in the new generation have more resources to learn about investment or financial
plan
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plans
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, most of them have planned their step of
life
 and set
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a goal
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goal
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goals
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 to reach it so buying or renting a
house
 will be set on the
plan
 but
that is
 not mean that
every
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every one
each
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 of them will do the same. Buying a
house
 when you
was
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were
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 so young and not have a
plan
of
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for
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 your
life
 may lead to other problems
such
 as changing job and
have
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having
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 to work
on
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in
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other place
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another place
other places
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 that
far
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is far
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 from
this
house
, you may have to move to live near a new company and rent another
condomenium
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condominium
 or
house
. That will make you have
extra
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the extra
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 expense and have to pay
unnessessary
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unnecessary
 cost
then
 cash flow problem
occured
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occurred
 in
this
 case rental is
better
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a better
the better
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 choice to choose if you are not really sure where do you need to
sattle
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settle
 your
life
. In conclusion,
purchaseing
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purchasing
 a
house
 or renting it is
every
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everybody
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body
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body's
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 choice but it has to
well
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be well
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 considerate and align with
life
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your life
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plan
eventhough
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even though
 it may lead
other
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to other
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 problem
to
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in
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 your
life
 or makes it struggle with
hardly
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hard
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expense
Correct quantifier usage
any expense
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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