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In some countries owning a home rather than renting one is considered very important. Why might this be the case? Is this a positive or negative development?

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Many
people
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 argue that renting a home is not good as acquiring it. In my opinion,
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 is a negative situation because each
people
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 have their lifestyle and different living
plan
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 and buying accommodation do not an answer for every
people
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. Purchasing a residence is
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 a big deal for every
people
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 because they have to spend a high amount of money on it, some
people
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 have to collect their money almost of their
life
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 to get it. So it means that they have to be ready for it and well-considered before having a decision. Nowadays,
people
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 in the new generation have more resources to learn about investment or financial plans, most of them have planned their step of
life
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 and set a goal to reach it so buying or renting a
house
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 will be set on the
plan
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 but
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 not mean that every one of them will do the same. Buying a
house
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 when you were so young and not have a
plan
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 for your
life
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 may lead to other problems
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 as changing jobs and having to work in another place
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 far from your accommodation, you may have to move to live near a new company and rent another condominium or
house
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. That will make you have the extra expense and have to pay the unnecessary cost
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 cash flow problem occurred. In
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 case, rental is a better choice to choose if you are not sure where do you need to settle your
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. In conclusion, purchasing a
house
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 or renting it is everybody's choice but it has to be well considerate and align with their
life
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plan
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 even though it may lead to other problems in your
life
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 or makes it struggle with hard expense.
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