Both governments and individuals are spending vast amounts of money protecting animals and their habitat. This money could be better spent dealing with fundamental issues in society such as poverty and health care.To what extent do you agree?

It is important to take
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of our environment and
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animals
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habitat
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because , human life
depend
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on nature. So
i
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agree to spend money on keeping
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the earth
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earth
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nature
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is equally important as meeting primary issues facing
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society
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a society
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like poverty and health
care
.
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essay
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about the reason from my point of view. The creatures
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around us providing
healthy
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lifestyle
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life style
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,
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if we take
care
of them .
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Dogs
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are
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gurding
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guarding
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our home and show affection towards
thier
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their
boss. At the same time
distroying
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destroying
forest because of
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overpopulation
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over population
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create
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problem of
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distinction
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of birds and animals from their natural habitat,
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to regulate that phenomenon,
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has to take action towards saving trees and saving
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as how it is.
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white tiger is disappearing from the country like India
as a result
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over population
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.
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,
government
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has
equal
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responsibility to take
care
of the society for
the nations development and prosperity
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the nation's development and prosperity
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, by initiating free medical and educational
asscess
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access
and
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nutrious
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nutritious
food
in
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a low cost.
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indian
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government provide ten kg
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for one month
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who
are belongs
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to
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low income
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scale, in order to reduce the percentage of poverty in the country. At the same
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there are lots of schemes like 'arogya
manthra'
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mantra
to ensure getting medical treatment at free cost at home for older people. To
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, nature and people are
corelated
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correlated
with each other and government has to support both of them without harming each other and introduce new rules and
regulaions
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regulations
to maintain balance in
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and
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life.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • ecosystem services
  • ethical imperative
  • conservation
  • natural habitats
  • interconnectedness
  • preclude
  • false dichotomy
  • holistic approaches
  • sustainable development
  • environmental stewardship
  • social welfare
  • poverty alleviation
  • eco-tourism
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