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Immigration has a major impact on the society. What are the main reason of immigration? To what concequences can it lead?

#immigration #impact #society #reason #concequences
There is no doubt that
immigration
 has
significant
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 effect on
the
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contemporary society.Each year more and more
people
 from all over the world decide to leave their home
countries
 and move to another place.
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explore
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 some of the reasons and the consequences of
immigration
. In my view, the main consideration of changing
people
's native place from
third
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 world to developed
countries
 is quality of
life
 and safety of the family for the present and the future. They get better employment
oppochunities
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opportunities
 and as a crucial result receive higher income for the covering cost of living and for
comfortable
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a comfortable
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life
 and give proper education
for
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to
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 the children. Living in a wealthy
country
 always
offer
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offers
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stable
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 economy for them.
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, recently who settled in Canada from my native
people
 enjoy their
life
 delightfully. They explain their happiness stories
in
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 social media with
the
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pictures. Other
reason
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reasons
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 that whole families
to
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cross the borders from
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their mother
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mother land
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motherland
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 are wars and
varies
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crisis
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crises
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of
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in
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 the
country
.
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, many newspapers say that many Sri Lankan refugees have
migrate
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 for seeking security. They have moved to Gulf
countries
such
 as
Soudi
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Saudi
 Arabia and Oman for escaping from
economic
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the economic
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 crisis they faced begging
of
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in
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year
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the year
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 2022.
Nevertheless
,
immigration
 sometimes
couses
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causes
cause
 more issues than
solves
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 resulting in negative aspects for both
immigraters
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immigration
immigrates
 and the new
countries
.
First
 of all most of the
people
 who come to another
country
 do not find
the the
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jobs because of the lack of language skills and adaptation the newcomer faced.
Thus
 the authorities
has
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 to run
for
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various
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the various
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 assistance programme
for
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 help
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those
people
.
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 leads to
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 in
the
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society.
Secondly
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 not all
of
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refugees
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the refugees
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 receive proper food and medical care and they are at risk
even
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of even
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 changing to a new
country
.
This
 shows many of them sustain medical issues
such
 as diabetes, fluctuating blood
peressure
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pressure
 and cardiac disease
for
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physically and anxiety or depression
for
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mentally. Some adults even
they
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though they
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 have
specialized
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 often do not get what they are looking for. In conclusion, I think
people
's
immigration
 offers a better
life
.
However
,
life
after
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migrate
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 might not
be
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always meet their expectations, so it is very important to consider all the possible outcomes from the problems and educate enough by themselves.
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