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Immigration has a major impact on the society. What are the main reason of immigration? To what concequences can it lead?

#immigration #impact #society #reason #concequences
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There is no doubt that
immigration
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 has
significant
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a significant
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 effect on
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contemporary society.Each year more and more
people
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 from all over the world decide to leave their home
countries
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 and move to another place.
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explore
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 some of the reasons and the consequences of
immigration
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. In my view, the main consideration of changing
people
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's native place from
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third
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 world to developed
countries
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 is quality of
life
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 and safety of the family for the present and the future. They get better employment
oppochunities
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opportunities
 and as a crucial result receive higher income for the covering cost of living and for
comfortable
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life
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 and give proper education
for
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 the children. Living in a wealthy
country
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 always
offer
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stable
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a stable
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 economy for them.
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, recently who settled in Canada from my native
people
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 enjoy their
life
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 delightfully. They explain their happiness stories
in
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 social media with
the
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pictures. Other
reason
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reasons
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 that whole families
to
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cross the borders from
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their mother
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mother land
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motherland
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 are wars and
varies
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crisis
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crises
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of
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in
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 the
country
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.
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, many newspapers say that many Sri Lankan refugees have
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 for seeking security. They have moved to Gulf
countries
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such
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 as
Soudi
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Saudi
 Arabia and Oman for escaping from
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the economic
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 crisis they faced begging
of
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in
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year
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 2022.
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,
immigration
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 sometimes
couses
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causes
cause
 more issues than
solves
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 resulting in negative aspects for both
immigraters
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immigration
immigrates
 and the new
countries
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.
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 of all most of the
people
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 who come to another
country
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 do not find
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jobs because of the lack of language skills and adaptation the newcomer faced.
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 to run
for
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various
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the various
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 assistance programme
for
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to
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 help
for
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those
people
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.
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 in
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society.
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Secondly
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 not all
of
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refugees
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the refugees
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 receive proper food and medical care and they are at risk
even
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of even
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 changing to a new
country
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.
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 shows many of them sustain medical issues
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 as diabetes, fluctuating blood
peressure
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pressure
 and cardiac disease
for
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physically and anxiety or depression
for
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mentally. Some adults even
they
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though they
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 have
specialized
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 often do not get what they are looking for. In conclusion, I think
people
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's
immigration
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 offers a better
life
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.
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,
life
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after
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migrate
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 might not
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always meet their expectations, so it is very important to consider all the possible outcomes from the problems and educate enough by themselves.
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