in some countries, it is now for people to buy product made in other countries .to what extent do the benefits of this development outweigh the problem?

Shopping
international
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products is becoming increasingly popular
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yound
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young
people and has gained much more scholarly attention.
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, buying products from the different countries does more harm than good or vice-versa is a debatable topic.
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essay will discuss the benefits of doing shopping using the international platforms and will argue why
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has several favourable elements that support
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the country's
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development. Admittedly it is true, that people are obsessed with
foreigh
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foreign
made products
for example
bikes, cars and watches.
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