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Band 5

People aim to keep a balance between their work and other parts of their lives

In contemporary society, many
people
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 are confused about balancing their
work
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 and family
time
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. Most of the
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,
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in the society deeply stressed from
work
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, some
people
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 are trapped and have to think we may figure out issue solutions, while others few
people
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 achieve its goal, and
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 problems of the job marketing
competitions
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 and ever
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on
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 the unemployment rate. Most
of
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employer
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 has to spend a lot of off-
work
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time
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 to improve themself to get
promotion
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 or
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 salary.
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, if someone is working in the hospitality industry, during the hotel peak seasons or
holiday
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 period, some of the staff willing to
work
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holiday
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 can get double pay. Nowadays, especially
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some parents, they face
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all
kind
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 of
bill
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bills
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 pay,
include
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 children’s spending, house rental fee, tax pay, etc.
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, when they have an opportunity
earn
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 more income, I believed most
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 would give up
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 rather than
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holiday
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.
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, moving to consider
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 management to balance
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 and leisure
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. In my thinking way, a possible solution to
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 problem would
be make
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 a list around the
schedule
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work hours
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workhours
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work hours
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,
write
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 down and highlight every important date,
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family
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a family
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member
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 birthday, or anniversary. Meanwhile, building
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relationship
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relationships
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 with co-workers, just in case exchange roster shift if something happens
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out of the blue. What is more, one immediate practical solution is to set up the bottom line for some special
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 no more
work
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 to enjoy family
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. To sum up, we may reasonable to arrange
work
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 and leisure
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 which able to do schedule list, under
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 circumstance, we could find out organizer solution our lifetime.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • work-life balance
  • burnout
  • flexible work arrangements
  • remote work
  • unplug
  • boundaries
  • workplace culture
  • societal pressure
  • stress management
  • time management
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