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People think that schools should select students according to their academic abilities, while others believe that it is better to have students with different abilities studying together. Discuss both views and state your opinion.

#people #schools #students #abilities
The growing importance of curricular activities along with academic studies
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 becoming increasingly popular in educational sectors and
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 gained much more scholarly attention.
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, the effectiveness of the topic is debatable. Some
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, that the students who are academically strong should be part of the school, while, others hold the opinion, that every child, irrespective of her interest and ability should have equal rights in being part of the school educational system.
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 in detail and provide evidence as to why
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 proposition has several strong
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 that
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 attention. The debate surrounding the topic is most charged in
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today's
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 world, there is an army of people
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convinced
, that every child has different abilities, some are academically strong while other are not.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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