An increasing number of people choose to live in big cities. What the problems will this bring about? Should the government encourage people to live in small town?

Nowadays, more and more
people
are moving from rural to urban areas in
order
to explore surplus
opportunities
and earn money. Due to
this
, bigger
cities
are getting more populated and resources are getting
delpleated
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depleted
as compared to villages.
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the problems that it may arise and steps that government can take to motivate
people
to stay back in smaller
towns
. There are many reasons that
people
from small
towns
move to bigger
cities
and the main reason
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lack
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the lack
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of job
opportunities
, health facilities, education and standard of living that they expect to have.
Therefore
, they tend to shift in
order
to make money and support their family back in their hometown.
However
,
this
leads to a lot of problems like metropolitan
cities
are getting crowded,
polluted
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and day-to-day
iems
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items
are getting costlier because demand is high and supply is low.
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demand
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oil is very high as compared to the supply which is why there is a hike in oil price.
Moreover
,
naural
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natural
resources like water and trees are getting
depleated
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depleted
in big
cities
.
For instance
, more
people
have now moved to
urban
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area and they require
house
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the house
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to live
hence
deforestation is being done to
accomodate
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accommodate
all of them.
On the other hand
, in
villages
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the houses that were built are mostly empty and
majority
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the majority
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of the younger population have moved to big
cities
leaving behind elderlies. The work like farming, milking cows, driving tractors
etcetra
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etcetera
in small
towns
require
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manual labour which cannot be carried out by elderly
people
.
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Therefore
,
government
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the government
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should take certain measures to encourage
people
to live in small
towns
like building hospitals and ensuring doctors are available all the time, monitoring education in schools and giving financial incentives to companies in
order
to attract them to set their set up in rural areas which will create business
opportunities
for
people
. In
order
to avoid
people
from moving to bigger
cities
government can introduce measures to draw the attention of
people
to stay back in small
towns
by
providng
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providing
better healthcare facilities, education and job
opportunities
.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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