In some countries, there has been an increase in adverstisements that try to persuade children to buy snacks, toys and other items. Parents often argue that these announcements are unfair. Discuss both perspectives and give your opinion?

It is often argued that there
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rising
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of
commercials
to motivate
minors
to buy products in some nations, whilst others disagree and think that these are not beneficial for the
children
.
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concerns hold true. On the one hand, there are nations which focus on
commercials
to motivate
minors
to buy their displayed products
such
as toys and snacks.
This
is largely due to their
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objective. Most
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the companies attain huge benefits in their sales through
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advertisements. These
commercials
are
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to influence the psychology of
children
.
Consequently
, they become motivated and enforce their parents to buy for them. A recent study by the New York Times concluded that announcements of toys and snacks
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made for the young groups
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surged the sales of organisations by threefold in
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comparison
to the other announcements.
However
, these toys can boost the creativity among
children
such
as legos
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enhance
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cognitive
skills and motor abilities which has
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influence
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latter
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life.
On the other hand
, there are parents who think that advertisements
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their academic performance.
This
is because
minors
are becoming more
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to them and
this
will lead to
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of time.
As a result
, they can not concentrate on their academic studies and
this
will lower their grades significantly.
For instance
, these days
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children
often play video games
such
as Pubg and call of duty, which consume
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time
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their studies.
Therefore
,
announcementscan
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announcements can
announcements
hinder the progress of the
children
's future in attaining good jobs. In conclusion,
although
advertisements are profit-driven they can have few benefits in terms of
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of
children
. I strongly believe that
commercials
are misleading to
minors
, which might limit their future academic prospects.
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