Some people say now there is less communication between family members than in the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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been crucial in maintaining strong bonds in a family. Nowadays, experts suggest that there is decreased interaction within

family

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. As

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the rising priority of

work

and career and the advent of

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and technology in our everyday lives, I agree that the reduction in

communication

between family

members

is becoming more prevalent. The culprit of

this

problem lies in modernization.

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zation of cities has brought about various changes, including

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in

people

's

lifestyle

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and

preference

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. Previously,

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of the society

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family-centred, where

people

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large

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amount of time with their families .

However

, with modernization,

people

have grown to be more self-centred, with

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a shift

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of priorities from family to

work

and career development. A striking example would be the long hours

people

spend at

work

now, compared with decades ago. Research by

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University

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of Hong Kong revealed that over three-quarters of the population spend over eight hours at

work

every day including weekends,

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whereas

only less than half of the society spend similar hours at

work

three decades ago. The longer time parents spend at

work

, the lesser time for them to chat and take care of their

offsprings

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.

Consequently

,

communication

within the family would be inevitably compromised.

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, the situation

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by

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in computer technology. Family

members

are often too busy playing on the computer or roaming online

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and gradually become negligent of their loved ones who live with them.

Furthermore

, crucial face-to-face interactions between family

members

have drastically reduced, leading to

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of loneliness and isolation. A good illustration would be my uncle Tim. He lives with his family, but only

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with them using online tools like Facebook and Whatsapp, and only talks to them once in a blue moon. To conclude,

interaction

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the interaction

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between family

members

hsd dramatically reduced nowadays

as a result

of modernization and

development

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of online technology. It is crucial that we should look into the crux of

this

problem and introduce measures to avoid

further

communication

breakdown in families.