Some People believe that only the strongest individuals and teams can succeed in sports. Others think that success in sports depends on mental attitudes. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Sports
competitions can make
people
thrill, and it is always fun to bet with friends which one or which
team
can win. When it comes to
this
,
people
hold different views on who will be the champion. Some
people
think that medals should go to the fittest and strongest individuals and teams. As the Olympic spirit claims faster, stronger, and higher. No one can deny the fact that a robust athlete is more likely to win a gold medal. It is all written on his or her muscles and height. Just like
people
who have higher intelligence are more likely to succeed in scientific fields, these athletes are designed by god in the
sports
business. Unlike high IQ
people
, whom you can not identify from their appearance, the muscles cannot be hidden.
That is
why the audience has faith in them.
Also
, talented athletes can learn all the moves and actions more efficiently compared to the others. Gradually, they will build more confidence and experience
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to the rest relatively weaker ones. Others argue that mental attitude is more important. Even though physical fitness is very important, there are other factors that need to take into consideration when predicting who can win. Willpower, strategy, and nervousness, are all factors that influence an athlete's performance.
That is
why many potential world record breakers end up failing in the real games. They fail to adjust their heart in the right place, even though they can achieve great results in practice. Meanwhile, compared to individual
sports
,
team
sports
are another story. A
team
with all fittest and strongest
team
members does not necessarily mean it can win the game.
Otherwise
, the USA dream
team
will bring medals after medals in the Olympic games. Not everyone needs to be strong in a
team
, as long as he or she fits the position, cooperates with others well, and maximises the competence of a
team
. In my opinion, I think good physical fitness is a foundation, but it does not represent everything. To me, mental attitudes are more important in the
sports
game because
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the real world, the physical fitness difference between the
first
and
second
can be ignored.
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