At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

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Our generation is presenting an inversion in world population growth. In the past, life expectancy was very low due to poor quality of life, misdevelopment of medicine and migration of a large part of the population from the countryside to cities. Nowadays, the young adults are the largest part of some
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because there is
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a reduction in the mortality rate.
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situation is an advantage in developing
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because the youth can be trained and specialized by industries or universities for high qualification jobs. The government can
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give more credit to spin the job market and generate jobs.
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, the older
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should spend the rest of their days receiving the benefits from the government as a reward for all the work during their lives.
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, some
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don't support population growth anymore, especially young
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considering that they can increase
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number.
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in China, the government had to take some measures to control
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factor and incentivize
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to not have more than one child. There are some
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who disagree about
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proposition or any kind of intervention affirming that
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violates democracy rights.
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, there are more
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in development in the world than overpopulated, so the advantages overweigh the bad points.
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,
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have more family planning and more options for
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, we can focus on good points about generating jobs, giving opportunities to the newly graduated and offering a quality of life to the elderly.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • demographic
  • workforce
  • productivity
  • innovation
  • skilled labor
  • social development
  • technology
  • dividend
  • competition
  • resources
  • social welfare
  • unrest
  • instability
  • healthcare
  • elderly care
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