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Many student choose to take a gap year before starting university, to travel or gain work experience. Do you think this is a good idea or a waste of time? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#student #gap #year #university #travel #gain #work #idea #waste #time
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There had been
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 since humanity exists.
stress
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 is now regarded as
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a major
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 problem of all
time
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. some
people
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 believe that there
were
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 more pressure on
people
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 in old days. The only thing was they did not know how to
discribe
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describe
 it as
stress
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.
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, others believe that
people
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 suffer from
stress
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 more than
any
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 other
time
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. it has
accepted
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 that
stress
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 causes so many diseases. that indicates that there
are
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 more
pressuer
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pressure
pressures
 on humanity than ever. The world is getting crowded and crowded. Eventually, there are not enough job vacancies for everyone. The race in
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the work
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workplace
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work place
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workplace
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 is much
serious
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 and crucial than old days. The
way
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 how we all earn money is mostly depending on how
succesfull
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successful
 we are. That hard work puts so much pressure on
people
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.
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 that race, city
life
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, itself is
also
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 so
stressfull
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stressful
. Especially traffic
jam
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,
noises
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noise
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 and light pollution
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effect
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affect
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people
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 in bad ways. These are the improvements depending on technological inventions.
The
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life
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 would be easier but
majority
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 of these inventions are not good for human health. Technology provides us easier
life
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 but the
way
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 how
the
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technoloh
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technology
 badly
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effects
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 our health is approved by so many doctors. Even there are some
of
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the diseases
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that exists
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exists
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 just because of
stress
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. despite
of
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the city
life
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, villages or towns are less
stressfull
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stressful
 and
this
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 might be the personal
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choose
choice
. Yet
long
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time
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 ago, even cities weren't crowded at all.
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 there
were
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stress
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 in
other
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way
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such
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 as lack of food.
People
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 at that
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 didn't know how to describe
the
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stress
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. They were
live
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 as a bigger family due to decrease their expenses and in that
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way
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 they used to be
helpfull
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helpful
 to each other as a part of their family. That
had
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boosted their
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morale
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moral
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morale
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 and cure their health.
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