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Band 5.5

Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Immigration to a
country
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 with a foreign spoken
language
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 is difficult
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 say the least. The social and practical daily struggles that an immigrant face
are
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 critical problems that can not be underestimated;
however
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, I am convinced that the impacts these issues put on an individual's life is influenced considerably by that person's personality and the
people
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 he or she is in contact with. Several valid points are being
disscused
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discussed
 that
demonestrate
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demonstrate
 the difficulty of living in a new
country
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 with a new
language
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.
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 of all, human is a social creature who needs to interact with other
people
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.
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, for
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 to survive in
new
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society
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, they need to find new friends and expand their relationships, and for doing that the vital
requirment
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requirement
 is the ability
of speaking
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 their
language
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.
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, not knowing the
language
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 can result
to
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 them being isolated and
homesicks
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homesick
homesickness
 which can
leads
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 to them
returing
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returning
 to their hometown.
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 that, knowing the
language
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 can directly affect finding jobs.
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 is because for being accepted in the
first
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 stage of
a
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recruitment, which is handling an interview, applicants should be able to use their communication skills to express themselves.
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, for an immigrant to find their place in a new
country
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 they have to find occupation and friends which is not possible unless by learning the destination
language
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. Despite the above so-called obstacles
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 living in a
country
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 without speaking their
language
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, there are many
people
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 who can survive without it. A good example of a
country
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 that has a lot of residents who can not speak English
is
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 Canada.
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 is because its multicultural
society
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 has accepted the fact that many immigrants may not be able to speak English properly.
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, the community is handling
this
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 problem by providing translation services which help new immigrants to be
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productive
society
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member
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.
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, there are many introverted
people
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 who can survive in a
society
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 without being in contact with others and live in their comfort zones, and use applications like google
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whenever
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when ever
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whenever
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 they need to interact with other
people
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. To sum up, it is
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noteworthy
not worthy
 to bear in mind that knowing the
language
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 of a
country
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 where
an individual moves
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 to, can help them to handle social and practical struggles better.
Nevertheless
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, I believe base on the individuals'
charactristics
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characteristics
 and the community they are going to live
, the
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 degree of
language
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's importance can be variable.

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Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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