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All cars that burn fossil fuel should be banned and electric cars should replace them. Do you agree or disagree.

#cars #fuel
Car technology should overcome old vehicles and they must be transferred gradually to be electric machines. In
this
 essay, I will discuss why I agree with
this
 Idea and give my opinion.
Firstly
, by using electric
cars
people
 help to reduce the pollution in the countries and specifically in the cities that are crowded.
Also
, it makes
people
 feel more comfortable being nature friendly and sustainable. (example)
Moreover
,
people
 can save more money recharging their
cars
 with energy
instead
 of using gas. The regular expenses of an Electric car's owners will decrease significantly. Looking at the current war events other situations have been affecting the fuel price. So it is not a surprise it may be more expensive.
Secondly
, the
cars
 which work on fossil fuel are still faster, more practical and more widespread than electric
cars
, that’s the reason why some
people
 preferred the normal car more than electric
cars
. But with the technological revolution, electric
cars
 will be more developed. In conclusion, we need to be more independent in the electric
cars
 which will help all
people
 to improve their lives and be environmentally friendly. I have personally changed my old vehicle to a new electric machine to be part of that change.
Submitted by Andrea Barreto on

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