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Crime rates are likely to decline due to the advancements in technology, which will help prevent and solve crimes in an easier way. Do you agree or disagree?

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With the advances in
technology
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 these days, preventing and solving
crime
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 rates are more efficient,
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, with the developed
security
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 systems and CCTVs, scandal rates are likely to decrease.
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, the advancement in automation can
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 be beneficial to some criminals
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 as hackers as well.
Technology
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 plays an important part in preventing and solving crimes.
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, it is easier to prevent
crime
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 with the advances in
security
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 systems these days
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 as CCTVs, key cards, passwords, fingerprint scanners, face scanners, license plate scanners, etc. Clearly, the
security
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 system can work more efficiently than
a human
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a human security guard
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security
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 guards.
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, with
technology
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, it is easier to track down and solve crimes with evidence
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 as fingerprints, hair, blood, pictures and videos.
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, it is easier to access information from
an online databases
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online databases
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 as practice satellites to locate a location or benefit database pictures to find someone.
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, with the advances in
technology
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, it is more convenient for people to manage their financial transactions with smartphones through online banking services. If it is easier for bank customers, it is easier for criminals as well. Hackers sometimes can have access to private information through the loophole of the system and use that information to commit crimes.
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, hackers that have access to banking data and phone
number
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 can act as a bank’s call centre and trick customers. In conclusion,
technology
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 both has advantages and disadvantages in the
crime
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 rate. I agree that with the support of
technology
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, the
crime
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 rate is likely to decline.
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,
technology
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 should be used with caution to prevent
crime
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 as well.

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