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Some universities now offer their courses on the Internet so that people can study online. Is this a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Without a denying, a widely heated debate as to taking on
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program
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 provided by universities has received great attention from the public. Whereas some people are an opposite opinion toward the opinion, as far as I am concerned, I am in
favor
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 of the statement and an array of reasons will be thoroughly elaborated on as follows. Thanks to advanced technologies, online
courses
 are looked upon as another means of learning. One primary reason is that
students
 and professors would not be limited by distances or spaces for online
courses
 to provide more
students
 with learning chances. To put it another way, owing to studying online rather than in a classroom, the capacity of online
students
 could be more than that in a classroom;
in addition
, even though some
students
 live in other countries or
time
 zones, they are capable of enjoying their education right. Take my school as an example. Due to the pandemic,
students
 are
stucking
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stocking
 in their homes to prevent infecting viruses.
As a result
, they could take on online
courses
 at their places and review the lecture content recorded by online cameras arbitrarily.
Moreover
, as far as I am concerned, taking on online
courses
 could make
students
 save
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time
of
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commuting and expenditure on transportation; as a consequence, they are capable of making good use of their
time
 to do more valuable things. To be more specific, in the past, some
students
 must spend their
time
 and money in order to go the campus to learn;
however
, studying online can avert and mitigate these kinds of problems; as a consequence, they can concentrate on learning. A study conducted by National Taiwan University concluded that studying online not only saves the commuting
time
 but
also
 energy;
hence
;
students
 would not get distracted easily owing to their physical strength and spirit. To sum up, based on the aforementioned, even though some people are opposed to studying online;
however
 if the school can provide good quality
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online
courses
, I am deeply convinced that studying online is a positive development.
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