You eat in your college cafeteria everyday lunchtime. However, you think it needs some improvements.

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I am a college student doing pg in alpa college.I am a
hostelite
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hostility
host elite
and
hence
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itself
haing
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having
lunch from the college cafeteria.The cafeteria provides
buffet
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a buffet
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system for each individual for taking the
food
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which is very
uch
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much
useful.The
food
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products are not very much
attactive
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attractive
as it has not
meeting
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up
variety
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dishes for the cash
worthness
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worthiness
worthless
.
Eventhough
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Even though
due to the lack of another restaurant we all are forced to take up the canteen
food
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itself.
Its
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the reason that they are forcing the items
the
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they
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decided for serving.Many of my friends
also
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having
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the same issue of
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the same
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same
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some
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kind.
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Moreover even
as serving as buffet the
croud
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crowd
gathering should be maintained in lines for smooth operations which they are not even trying
also
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.Overall they are utilising our patience with their communal
attittude
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attitude
.The quantity of
food
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items served is surplus but the issue is that the served items should be tastier and
apreciatably
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appreciably
healthier too.The money which
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they
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the
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they
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are taking for the
food
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as
fee
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a fee
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should be
monthly
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the monthly
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basis and not on
weekly
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a weekly
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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