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Topic: Some people think that the best way to reduce crime is to give longer prison sentences. Others, however, believe there are better alternative ways of reducing crime. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Recently decades, the type and number of
crimes
 are increasing around the world. Because of that, some
people
 think that the best way to reduce
crime
 is to give longer prison sentences. Others,
however
, believe there are better alternative ways of reducing
crime
. In
this
 essay, I will give my opinion on those both views. On the
one
 hand, penalties and sanctions for
crime
 are
one
 of
the
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effective measures to prevent and
take down
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a case
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case
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cases
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 of
crime
.
For example
,
people
 don't want to commit a
crime
 which has long years of
of
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jail
penalty
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such
 as murder and other serious
crime
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crimes
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. Sometimes, the policy of imprisonment is unsuited for
such
crimes
.
In particular
, some
people
 who committed no serious
crimes
 are punished with long years in jail penalty.
On the other hand
, there are many worthwhile methods to prevent any
crime
 excluding imprisonment.
For example
, improving awareness of
people
 at young ages and introducing harmfulness of
crime
 to them.
In addition
, evolving the compassion and kind heart of children and creating a safe society.
Moreover
, decreasing and combating poverty is
one
 of the important activities to safeguard against
crime
. In conclusion, there are many reasons to influence
for
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crime
such
 as poverty, sudden attack by someone and condition of
people
's psychology so only
one
 activity is not enough to combat
crime
.
Therefore
, proper policy should be taken by the government based on
above-mentioned
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 reasons in order to prevent any
crime
 and decrease the number of
crimes
.
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