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Some claim that studying abroad has greater benefits for a student's home country. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#student #home #country
It is undeniable that a suitable
education
 system plays a crucial role in the development of
countries
 by training qualified citizens. It is argued by some that students who go overseas for higher
education
 will be able to bring more advantages
for
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 their own
countries
.
This
 essay will discuss why I completely agree with
this
 assertion. two begin with, regarding the benefits, it is clear that it provides underdeveloped and developing
countries'
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countries
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 people with the opportunities not only to gain state-of-the-art knowledge about the latest advancements but
also
 to acquire worthwhile and feasible experience in various areas through studying in modern
countries
, which are of the latest technology and science.
in other words
, due to the lack of technological advancement and inefficient universities and associations in underdeveloped
countries
, they could not make progress in a diverse range of sectors.
For example
, a large number of Iranian university students are
traveling
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travelling
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 to the u.s and Canada to do courses in Medical Science in order to be informed
with
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 the latest methods.
On the other hand
, the only negative point governments might confront is the high cost of
education
 overseas, especially for ones facing economic crises. What I mean is that since
education
 overseas requires foreign currency, governments and communities are more likely to undergo financial problems. but, it is worth it because it ends up developing nations. To sum up,
although
traveling
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 abroad for higher
education
 appears to be costly not only for governments but
also
 for individuals, in my opinion,
this
 phenomenon leads to
countries
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countries'
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 prosperity in the long run due to having competent residents.
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