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In many countries, people are woking increasingly longer hours. What are reasons for this? Is it a positive or a negative effect.

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In
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 contemporary world, the majority of the nations are able to grow economical standards
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 their countries. wherever people are engaging in more and more industries and they are doing long
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 jobs in dad to day activities. While researchers indicated
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 circumstance becomes advantageous for employers,
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 it affects disadvantageous for
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 workers.
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 long
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 tasks.
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 two aspects , economical and cultural sectors which are boosting to
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 of the long
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 working systems. Wherever local always try to do these types of performances.
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, it assists to get
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 salary to manage their
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lifestyle
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life style
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lifestyle
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.
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, in Srilanka , 80% of youngsters worked in Colombo and they were able to do many activities during the day.
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, it helps to maintain their economical standards,
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,
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 of permanent enterprises are obtained by people because
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 enhance their personality and
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have
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 chances to distribute their cooperation to the local economy, which helps to get reputation from communities.
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, particularly, wherever the public faces some detrimental outcomes of stressful job sectors.
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, when they continuously do
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 tasks, automatically become mentally disorder patients.
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, in 2005, a Chinese survey shows that 65% of employees did their Work with
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 mindset and people always try to give priority to business sectors rather than their
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conscious
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. In conclusion, in my perspective, good results outweigh the bad results of long long working
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. Unless, we have goals in our lives, able to check e something one day. Particularly, human beings work
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 time,
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have access to pursue
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any thing
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 in their times because they have economical standards in their life.
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