In many countries, people are woking increasingly longer hours. What are reasons for this? Is it a positive or a negative effect.

It is true that work has an indispensable role to play in the context of anthropological history.
However
, more and more people have been working overtime nowadays. From my perspective, the phenomenon has already brought some negative
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. In
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essay, I will explain my viewpoints and reasons in detail in the ensuing paragraphs.
To begin
with, in the modern world, the shortage of manpower due to the low birth rate, young
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compete with each other fiercely.
For instance
, the candidate for a high-tech electronics industry needs a highly educated person who can speak multiple languages. Likely, it
also
offers an attractive salary.
Therefore
, once
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this
company, you will be expected to do more things. Based on
such
compelling evidence, the situation,
this
kind of extended working hours with unreasonable company policy, often makes employees struggle with whether to quit.
Besides
the aforementioned,
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generations are much more demanding of themselves than previous generations. Having
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personality is
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silent example.
Moreover
, the number of patients who have physical and mental problems caused by stress and overwork are
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rapidly in recent years. These indicate that using too much time for work indeed brings some drawbacks. In summary, despite the fact that working longer hours may
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your diligent personality and outstanding
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, their demerits must not be ignored.
Hence
, it is imperative that
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governments
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should regulate a strict
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to protect the health of citizens and reduce their pressure.
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