Human activity has had a negative impact on plants and animals around the world. Some people think that this cannot be change, while others believe actions can be taken to bring about a change. Discuss both and given your opinion.

There is no doubt that both plants and
animals
are suffering harmful
influence
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, as
the
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result of human behaviour. It is commonly believed by certain people that
such
tendency
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and
consequence
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consequences
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cannot
changed
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by human actions, while others disagree.
However
, in my view, it is possible to change
such
situation
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, as long as we find the correct and accurate methods. It is admired that some results caused by
human
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humans
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have no chance
to
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recovery
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, especially for the creature variety and species. People are crazy
in
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about
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hunting
high value
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animals
during the
last
century, for the feather can sell
in
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at
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high
price
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prices
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and the stone can be
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as expensive
decoration
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decorations
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, resulting
some
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animals
have in danger even no longer
existence
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among the world,
such
as the Gaoling Goat, which was the world-famous goat in the past and disappear due to
overcome
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hunting. From
this
, it is well-noticed that we should take
serious
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attitude towards
such
terrible
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a terrible
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situation and comprehensive review and recognize our mistakes.
On the other hand
, it
is remained
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space and opportunity to practice some plants and
animals
, which are in danger. In my hometown, the city which with dry and heat weather during the whole year, the size of
grassland
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steadily declined as
the
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affected by industry development and
terrify
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atmosphere.
However
, the situation has been changed and the grassland recovery again in our eye-sight for local
authority
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authorities
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consistently promote planting trees and issuing regulations to limit the popularity of chemical industries within the location. It is
obviously
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that some
environment
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environmental
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difficulties can be resolved through efficient approaches. In conclusion,
although
some rare
animals
and species disappear and never come back, it is necessary to make
change
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the change
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immediately and it really works. For individuals, it is easy to change
out
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our
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daily life via small changes,
such
as turning off the light when
leave
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home,
using
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and using
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recycle
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materials
instead
of plastic elements.
Furthermore
, it's now the time to cooperate together and make specific timeline
programes
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programmes
programs
to rescue our world, and it is the duty and capacity
for
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government
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the government
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.
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