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These days, many people have their own computer and telephone, so it is quite easy for them to do their job at home. Does working at home have more advantages or more disadvantages?

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Due to the development of science and technology, it is common for
people
 to
work
 from
home
. In my opinion, the negative impact of working from
home
 is greater than the positive impact. The advantage is that working from
home
 is relatively free. Working from
home
 can easily arrange family and
work
 tasks
,
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 because they can stop or start
work
 according to their own wishes.
For example
, they can take better care of the elderly and children. They can
also
 undertake any other tasks they need to perform during the day,
such
 as washing clothes or shopping, before completing the
work
. In general,
employees
 have more control over their lives. Despite these positive factors, there are still many deficiencies.
First
,
people
 who
work
 almost always from
home
 don't mix with their colleagues. When
people
 go to
work
, they are always surrounded by others, but at
home
,
employees
 may be alone most of the time.
This
 can lead to loneliness due to
lack
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 of interaction. Another disadvantage is that
people
 may have less influence on the company. Often, as unexpected problems arise, important decisions are made under the current stimulus. If there are no
employees
, others may have to intervene. If
this
 happens regularly,
employees
' contribution to the company may decline, which means that there is a higher possibility that things
such
 as
promotion
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 will be ignored. In a word,
although
 working from
home
 is more convenient for individuals, it still has more negative effects.
Therefore
, we should seriously consider the adverse effects of working from
home
.
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