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Today,the high sales of popular consumer goods reflects the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Advertisng
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Advertising
 is an essential element of good marketing.
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examine
 the drastic effect
advertisments
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advertisements
 have on the
consumer
, as well as, how
adverstiments
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advertisements
 create an illusion of social
status
. A good
advertisment
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advertisement
 has the power to create a non-
existant
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existent
 need in the
consumer
 for a
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certain
product
. An
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example
 of
this
 would be Apple. Apple manages to sell a new
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iPhone
 to its customers every year. They do
this
through
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 creating the illusion that the old
product
 is not
sufficiant
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sufficient
 for the
consumer
 anymore. Whilst in reality for the majority
this
 does not hold true. Though many believe
this
 illusion, which leads them to buy the new
product
.
This
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example
 of Apple is
transfarable
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transferable
transferrable
 to many other companies, as they follow a similar approach.
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Resulting
 in many
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unnecessary
 purchases around the globe. In many cases, people feel the need spend their hard-earned money on
such
products
,
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rather
 than on items they really need. In
addtion
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addition
, advertising
also
 has to power of creating an image of social
status
 that
supposebly
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supposedly
 comes with the
product
. Many
luxuary
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luxury
 brands try to convince the
consumer
, that their
products
 will elevate their social
status
 in society. They do
this
through
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by
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useing
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using
 people of desirable social
status
 in their
advertisments
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advertisements
,
such
 as
atheltes
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athletes
 or actors.
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Consequently
, many believe that they will be seen as
such
 high
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value
 figures
,
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 if they
pruchase
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purchase
 these
luxuary
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luxury
products
.
This
 may lead many to purchase
such
 goods, rather
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 other things which they might need more. In summary,
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advertisements
 are very
powerfull
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powerful
 tools
of
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 manipulating the
consumer
. They
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possess
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posses
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possess
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 the power of creating a non-
existant
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existent
 need in the
consumer
, in
addtion
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addition
 to creating an
illustion
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illusion
illustration
 of
socail
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social
status
. These factors may lead many to buy
products
 that they
acutally
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actually
 have no rational need for. Which downstream might
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 the
consumers
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consumer's
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abilty
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ability
 to
pruchase
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purchase
 goods that they really need.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumer behavior
  • perceived need
  • lifestyle aspirations
  • brand image
  • prestige
  • psychological techniques
  • scarcity
  • social proof
  • celebrity endorsements
  • technological advancements
  • product innovations
  • emerging consumer needs
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