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These days, many people have their own computer and telephone, so it is quite easy for them to do their job at home. Does working at home have more advantages or more disadvantages?

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spreading
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 of personal
computer
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 and
phone
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 has made it easy to
work
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 at
home
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.
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, quite a lot
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advantage
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advantages
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were
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 bought by
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 new form of
working
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.On the one hand, we can take the convenience of
domestic
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 facility to get the process of working more relaxing,
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, the cost of transportation can be removed to leave more time and energy
to
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 efficient daily
work
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, which
guarantee
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 the
fully
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 completion of tasks in employee’s working period. As we all know,every company can not provide the same comfortable environment as your
home
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.The
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lifestyles
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life styles
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lifestyles
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 of everyone can vary so much that someone who just standing in another one’s
home
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 feels uncomfortable.With respect to different
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lifestyles
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life styles
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lifestyles
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, working
at
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in
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 one’s own
home
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 can maximize his/her power for efficient working. Commuting is always a big and annoying part of
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work
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the work
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 experience for employees. Commuting is related to many aspects of society.
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a Traffic
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clash
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 can result in
a
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serious street blocking.For
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 reason,one’s time cost of commuting can be enlarged and get he/her stressed.
Bad
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 state will exactly cause bad performance.So,staying at
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home
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 and beginning the daily
work
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 with
fresh
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a fresh
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 state in the morning can be a nice choice for bosses. Anyway,there are
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 many opposite
effect
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for
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this
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 working style.But in today’s special period, the two advantages above can cover its bad effect and make it a good choice.If you want to get through
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 hard time,some extraordinary methods must be taken into account.
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