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Today, in spite of the scientifically proven necessity of life-long learning, the idea that innate intelligence (thinking skills) is enough to have a successful life is dominating the minds of people.   Why is this the case?  What can be done about this problem?

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Nowadays
people
 tend to believe that innate intelligence is the key to prosperous life ignoring the fact that
life-long
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 learning is essential to
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 dreams.
This
 essay will discuss the reasons for
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 of
this
 idea and suggest a possible solution: promoting self-development.
Firstly
, the main probable reason for exaggerating the importance of congenital features is spreading delusions. Social media and news are blowing
people
's minds with the idea that only certain
people
 can accomplish their goals. As there are lots of prominent figures all over the world,
people
 started to feel less confident about their own abilities.
For example
, Bill Gates, who has an IQ
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, and  relatives with the same outstanding achievements.
This
 indicates innate intelligence.
Secondly
,
people
's laziness could have been preventing them from accepting the truth. In fact, it is easier to blame it on hereditary factors
instead
 of making an effort.  In spite of the complexity of the
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 there is one effective way to deal with it. Increasing awareness among
people
 their mindset may change.  It can be done through publishing relevant articles and
helding
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holding
trainings
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, where the key arguments for the power of learning will be explained. With properly taken measures
people
 will be encouraged to start to work on their thinking abilities.  To conclude, promoting lifelong learning is a great method of dealing with
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. If
people
 understand the necessity of training thinking skills, the number of intelligent
people
 will definitely increase.
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