Today, in spite of the scientifically proven necessity of life-long learning, the idea that innate intelligence (thinking skills) is enough to have a successful life is dominating the minds of people. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

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Nowadays

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tend to believe that innate intelligence is the key to prosperous life ignoring the fact that

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learning is essential to

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essay will discuss the reasons for

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idea and suggest a possible solution: promoting self-development.

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, the main probable reason for exaggerating the importance of congenital features is spreading delusions. Social media and news are blowing

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's minds with the idea that only certain

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can accomplish their goals. As there are lots of prominent figures all over the world,

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started to feel less confident about their own abilities.

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, Bill Gates, who has an IQ

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, and  relatives with the same outstanding achievements.

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indicates innate intelligence.

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people

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's laziness could have been preventing them from accepting the truth. In fact, it is easier to blame it on hereditary factors

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of making an effort.  In spite of the complexity of the

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there is one effective way to deal with it. Increasing awareness among

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their mindset may change.  It can be done through publishing relevant articles and

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, where the key arguments for the power of learning will be explained. With properly taken measures

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will be encouraged to start to work on their thinking abilities.  To conclude, promoting lifelong learning is a great method of dealing with

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. If

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understand the necessity of training thinking skills, the number of intelligent

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will definitely increase.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 6.5

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Today, in spite of the scientifically proven necessity of life-long learning, the idea that innate intelligence (thinking skills) is enough to have a successful life is dominating the minds of people. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

Fully explain your ideas

Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding changes. Others, However, think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people feel that manufactures and supermarkets have the responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging of foods. Others argue that customers should avoid buying goods with a lot of packaging. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some people prefer to live in hot climate, while others like to live in cold climate.Discuss both views and give your own opinion.