Some people like to try new things, for example, places to visit and types of food. Other people prefer to keed doing things they are familiar with. Discuss both these attitudes and give your own opinion.

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the high school programmes. I strongly disagree with
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because it can be made people leave their
education
or work.
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of all, students have their own duties and responsibilities towards their
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parents. It is deniable that working in
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for their future career or
education
life whereas that would be good if educators bring up them in a proper way that
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this
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by themselves. In
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case, the
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result
will be useful both for students and for the
community
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to help
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community
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and make or provide campaigns for persuading others to attend these activities. In some foreign countries in the
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you can see people with down syndrome
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working as a main
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of
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. The reason that lies under
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in case of hiring people with some disabilities. To conclude,
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a compulsory
part
of their
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to do
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that are unpaid, it would be much more acceptable to encourage them to be
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this
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. It is recommended for
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and for the students to get
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life in the future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Novelty
  • Routine
  • Comfort zone
  • Risk-taker
  • Risk-averse
  • Enrichment
  • Personal growth
  • Innovation
  • Creativity
  • Stability
  • Tradition
  • Habit
  • Familiarity
  • Personal enrichment
  • Life stages
  • Fulfilling
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