You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter •say how you feel about his performance •give details of your musical activities •explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities

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Dear Eazi, How are you doing? I am writing to express my happiness towards your performance at the concert held yesterday, I must commend you for your wonderful performance. You sang wonderfully well,and I hope to reach out to souls with my voice just like you do. I believe you created an impact on people's lives yesterday. I am an upcoming R&B singer and I have several challenges regarding my musical career. I am an engineering student struggling to balance school work with my musical activities. It's really frustrating and it's starting to reflect badly on my academic performance.

However

,I try really hard to keep up with music by visiting the studio on days I am free and

also

recording tracks at intervals.

Finally

, I need your advice on how to cope with singing and how to be successful in the music industry because I look up to you a lot and hopefully,your words will motivate me. Please reach me with my number 09049563172 . Thank you for your time and I hope to hear from you. Yours Sincerely, Dumebi Ugwu.

Submitted by dumebiugwu1999 on Tue May 10 2022

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Grammar mistakes
 

6 paragraphs

180 words

7.00

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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