IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 7

You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter •say how you feel about his performance •give details of your musical activities •explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities

#concert #singers #singer #•say #performance #•give #activities #•explain
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
Dear Eazi, How are you doing? I am writing to express my happiness towards your performance at the concert held yesterday, I must commend you for your wonderful performance. You sang wonderfully well,and I hope to reach out to souls with my voice just like you do. I believe you created an impact on people's lives yesterday. I am an upcoming R&B singer and I have several challenges regarding my musical career. I am an engineering student struggling to balance school work with my musical activities. It's really frustrating and it's starting to reflect badly on my academic performance.
However
Linking Words
,I try really hard to keep up with music by visiting the studio on days I am free and
also
Linking Words
 recording tracks at intervals.
Finally
Linking Words
, I need your advice on how to cope with singing and how to be successful in the music industry because I look up to you a lot and hopefully,your words will motivate me. Please reach me with my number 09049563172 . Thank you for your time and I hope to hear from you. Yours Sincerely, Dumebi Ugwu.
Submitted by dumebiugwu1999 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

task response
Ensure a more comprehensive response to all parts of the task prompt.
coherence and cohesion
Improve the organization and clarity of ideas within each paragraph.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: